Homunculus (Father)

[Father [Azerik]]

---Character Information---
1.) Character Name -- Homunculus (aka. Father)
2.) Character Bio -- Originally a small spherical creature in a glass flask, Homunculus known as "Father" to his offspring Homunculi, is a very self centered being, who seems willing to do anything to keep himself from being chained down by the limitations life has placed on him.
3.) Relationships with people -- His relationship with Hohenheim is the only real one, though it be one of mutual dislike. His relationship with his offspring Homunculi is almost nonexistent, them being merely servants to him.
4.) Likes -- Power, Alchemy, getting what he wants.
5.) Dislikes -- Limitations, being defied, being trapped.
6.) History of the character -- Homunculus was created by an Alchemist from Xerses, using the blood of a servant boy, whom Humunculus would later give the name "Theophratus Bombastus Van Hohenheim", or Hohenheim for short, as a sign of his gratitude. Over an extended period of time, he taught Hohenheim Alchemy, giving him the chance to turn his life around, and getting the two of them the ear of the Emperor of Xerses. With this new found power, Homunculus tricked the Emperor into creating the Nation Wide Transmutation Circle, using the lure of immortality as his bait. In truth he was at the center of the Circle, with Hohenheim, and the two of them became living Philosopher's Stones, which allowed Homunculus to create his own mortal shell, which was nearly identical to that of Hohenheim's due to the fact that Homunculus was made from his blood.



---Your Info---
1.) Why do you want to be this character? Because I tend to be good at playing the villain, simply because, I have no need to worry about the feelings of the other characters. Being the villain is a very freeing experience, since morals are almost nonexistent. I also like how this characters motive is misunderstood to the very end, its not so much that he wanted power, its that he wanted to feel free, and misguided as he is, his sense of freedom required him to be all powerful so that no limitations applied to him.
2.) How far are you into the Anime? I've finished it all, 5 times.
3.) How far are you into the Manga? Finished about half of it, and watched all of Brotherhood.

---Writing Sample---

Deep underground, in the bowels of Central City, Homunculus was sitting on his throne, tapping his fingers on the arm of his massive chair, waiting for his 'children' to finish putting his plan into action. It was very close to the 'promised day', and he would soon have what he wanted; the power that lay behind the the Gate, the power of God. Surely then it would be enough...enough to rid him of his flask.

[Hoenheim Of Light [Zohi]]

HA... yes, some one who understands the nature of Homunculus. you should finish the manga, there are a couple tidbits that brotherhood left out...
1/3

(EDIT)

I agree that the grammar, particularly the extensive use of commas "," was hard to follow and had a bad flavor to the paragraph. but its still a good app, just fix your RP sample.

[Roy Mustang [Riley Ledon]]

^___^ Good, however the writing sample was a little difficult to understand for me grammatically. Mostly because of the first sentence. I knew what you were trying to get it, but it could use some rewording. 2/3 However, I know you're a competent writer.

[Father [Azerik]]

I get your point, and really, I would say I only went one comma too far (which I removed). Commas indicate a spot where you should pause in your reading, without ending the sentence. where I put commas is where I intended you to pause, for a sort of dramatic effect..mind you going over it again, I'll admit they were kind of confusing to one who isn't used to the type of literature I like to read/write.

In any case, I did a bit of rewording, changed the placement of the commas. (Also I think you meant 2/3 Affine?)

[Roy Mustang [Riley Ledon]]

Yeah, me and Hoenheim posted 4 minutes apart.

[AG]

3/3 -- Looks good to me :-)

[Father [Azerik]]

Sweet!